The government should ban smoking in public places , even though this would restrict some other people's freedom . Do you agree or disagree.

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Smoking is injurious to
health
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. Many scientists have proved that it is the main cause of deadly diseases like cancer, kidney issues and many more. The authorities should
banned
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smoking in public locations as it
also
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effects
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affects
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on
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apply
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other individuals. I strongly agree with the aforementioned notion and
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essay will put forth supporting arguments with relevant examples. To commence with, there are a plethora of reasons why smoking should be banned from public places. One of the most important
reason
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is
health
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issues. Smoke contains
dreadly
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deadly
chemicals which affect
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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cardiovascular
health
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.
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,it
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releases some toxic gases
such
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as carbon monoxide , nicotine and tar which inhales by other individuals and
as a result
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, smokers put their
health
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on
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risk as well.
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; In 2016, a survey
conducted
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which
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states that the main cause of more than half
percentage
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the percentage
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of
people
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deaths is harmful gases that leads to asthma problems which leads them to
die
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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