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Nowadays, many families move overseas for job opportunities ( Advantages & Disadvantages both views and give your opinions)

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The world is changing rapidly. Today,
people
 have many challenges because there
are
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 high demand
of
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 modern facilities in their lifetime. The chances to
work
at
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abroad are more than they have ever been in history. Some
people
 bring their
families
 to
oversea
 countries while they are working.
Although
, some
people
work
 alone in another
country
 and leave their
families
at
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 homeland. I will explain both merits as well as demerits in
this
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Firstly
, there are many benefits
for
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 working
oversea
.
For example
, there are many
people
 working outside of our
country
. Some
people
 have
been
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worked
many
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 years in
oversea
 countries and they stay together with their
families
. The partners can
work
also
 and kids have
the
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free education in some countries.
As a result
, The workers have
reasonable
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 income and
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are able
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able
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 to support their
families
 and friends in
home
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their home
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country
. If
,
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people
 have
better
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a better
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salary
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salaries
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 in
oversea
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the oversea
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country
, they would
stayed
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stay
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 with modern facilities in
different
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a different
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environment
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environments
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.
Additionally
, they can get
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plenty of
work
experiences
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experience
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 due to many changes
of
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 job availabilities
in
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oversea
. In
this
 case, it is positive effects
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people
 who
work
in
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abroad.
Secondly
, some
people
 like to
work
 alone in
oversea
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an oversea
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country
 because they like to save
the
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money as much as they can.
For instance
, some
people
work
 from morning to night
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seven days per week without
day
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a day
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 off. As a consequence, they don’t have
the
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a
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 life balance between
work
 and society.
Besides
, they will be got
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home sick
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homesick
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.
Finally
,
people
 have a lot of money but they don’t have time to spend it with
families
 or friends. To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages
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 any choice
at
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this
 issue. In my
opinions
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,
people
 should decide according to their situation.
Submitted by kokozay on

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