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Every year several langauges die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #langauges #people #life #languages #world
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the holiday job in your
museum
 which you have advertised recently in the newspaper. I am a 35-year-old girl
and
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interested
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 in working in
this
position
. I can speak English, Sinhala and Tamil quite well. I am a teacher in a government school. I teach history and I am very keen to have a holiday job
in
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this
 summer vacation, specifically in your
museum
.
Last
 year, I worked in a large bookshop during my vacation and enjoyed it very much. I would like to meet people and serve my
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 with my dedication, commitment and hard work. I really love history, because I have a great passion
in
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 it and I teach
this
 subject in
the
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school. I enjoyed going to your museums and I spent a considerable amount of time there. I visited your
museum
 with a team a few months ago and I am familiar with
this
museum
that
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 would give me the advantage to
work
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 there. I think you will be kind enough to consider me as a suitable candidate for
this
position
. I look forward to hearing from you soon and
further
discuss
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 my joining in
this
position
.
Your
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 faithfully Ama
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