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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

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In the modern
world
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 the
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 has become
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 for everyone and classroom should have
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computer
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 which helps both teacher and student in
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 process.It is often argued that
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 development is crucial for society, whilst others disagree and thinks
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 should increase numerous risk to student.
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view points
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 numerous and distinct benefits for
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 and
learner
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 with the help of
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computer
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, students can access
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data
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 or information which can be used as
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 and useful for their
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 activities.I strongly agree that
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 can
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help for
 example, the students who used to spend a lot of time going to the library and searching for a particular book
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 now can get that in-depth information or knowledge with the help of
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computer
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 quickly and easily. In the contrast, many people
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 and think
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 could
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 human interaction.
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 human interaction can be possible through
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a video-calling
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application
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 essay should disagree
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 be dismissed for
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 reason.
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 can directly get their solution from
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a computer
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 rather than asking
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the teacher.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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