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Some people think that students should learn more languages in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, knowing several languages has become fundamental, especially for youngers who are looking for a brighter future, rich in opportunities. Some people think that students should learn more than one idiom during their school time.
In contrast
, someone argues that focusing on just one language is better. Personally, I strongly agree with the former. We live in a globalised world, where people from different cultures and countries, work and live together in a shared multicultural background. In order to guarantee a future similar to
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, teaching more languages to pupils is extremely important, especially to the youngest.
For instance
, many schools in not anglophone countries
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Furthermore
, students need to know more idioms for two other reasons.
Firstly
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 their brains, and allows them to get more information. The researches that show more
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 teenagers are the clearest example.
Secondly
, by doing that, they are able to communicate with a wide variety of individuals who come from different countries, so as to provide them
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 open mindset.
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, Europe each year invests millions into the Erasmus, namely a project that gives the opportunity to scholars to spend a maximum of six months studying in a foreign school. To conclude, in my opinion, teaching plural languages at school is very important,
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 appreciating and enjoying your own native idiom is at the base.
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