Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people

believe it is the most

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to accept a bad

situation

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an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. While I accept that

this

may suit many

people

, I believe that it is better to try and improve

such

situations. On the one hand, it is fine to accept a bad

situation

in a

person

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life, human beings always make mistakes in most

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the new

situation

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situations

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. Maybe it is hard at

first

at the beginning of circumference to accept it, but it seems to get to terms with the reality

such

as unsatisfactory

job

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jobs

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and shortage of money for

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numerous ordinary

people

On the other hand

, it is better to try without thinking

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consequences after

encounter

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any

problems

. In fact, it will be extremely difficult to start the

first

step

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writing an essay to even starting a

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business

bussiness

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business

however

experience

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was gained and ideas were learned during

this

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tough times.

Furthermore

, failures were the important lessons that every

people

would

met

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in working and studying.

As a result

, we tend to improve whenever we had solved every trouble, these experience would make us stronger and deal better with each

problems

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when

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similar

problems

come to us again. As far as some

people

are concerned that the best way of solving

problems

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a bad

situation

was accepting it,

by contrast

in my own opinion, the best way to

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enhance

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ourselves is to accept our own

situation

but at the same time try to solve the

problems

that really ignore us and always learn and improve.

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3Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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