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Consider a situation where you are asked by your supervisor to participate in a group project at work. Your supervisor wants you to work with someone who has opinions that are very different than yours. Moreover, they feel very strongly about these opinions. Do you think that working with this person is a good idea?

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Working with someone with different
opinions
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 will explain why
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 think working with
such
 a person is a good idea. In an
organisation
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 everyone is different
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in terms
interms
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in terms
 of
strength
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, weaknesses and
ideas
 each employee brings to the business . Different
opinions
helps
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 the business to grow ,A company can benefit from different
opinions
 presented by employees. I would really love to work with a
collegue
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colleague
 with
different
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a different
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 opinion
with
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 mine because having
same
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opinions
 is boring and there is no fun when you
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 the project. A different opinionated
collegue
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colleague
college
 will make work exciting because you will be both looking forward to
see
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 the outcome of your different
ideas
. I think everyone should be given a platform where they can outlay their
opinions
 and
ideas
 in a company
this
 shows that each person is valued in the organisation.The only disadvantage that can rise is the other co-worker might not want to hear my
opinions
 and respect and implement my
ideas
 because he/ she
feel
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 strongly about his / her
opinions
 only.
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Inconclusion
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,
i
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 will prefer working with
this
collegue
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colleague
college
 because he/ she strongly
believe
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 in his /herself.
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