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Nowadays more people move away from their friend and families for work do the advantage outweigh the disadvantage

#people #move #friend #families #work #advantage
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In recent days, most
of
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the
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people
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move
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 away to foreign
nation
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nations
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 from their relatives, close
friend
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friends
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 and families
for finding
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 cash. Especially, grown-ups and
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juveniles
.There are pros and cons. In
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 topic. Some of
reasons
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the reasons
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 why they
move
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 away to another country. To commence with, there are a lot of
reason
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, what I mean In our society.
people
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 have various
typs
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types
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studing
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studying
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However
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 they do not use it.
Fisrt
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 of all,
people
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 who
move
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 their family and hometown. A good illustration of
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 Uzbekistan and other places
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people
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. They
move
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another countries
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another country
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 every time.
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result
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 they do not see and
living
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 together. It is true that
,
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may be
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maybe
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 it is very hard without living
guaridions
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guardians
 and offspring. By
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contrast
, they
complusory
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compulsory
 do
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 work. On the other side,
three
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 are some
advantage
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advantages
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 sides. Many
people
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is
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 leaving to abroad state.
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 they learn
their
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about their
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 cultures and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. Another issue is that it can be very difficult to
bein
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 a new life from
far
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a far
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 hometown.
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amke
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make
 a friend .
Basicly
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Basically
people
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 learn a new language.
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, starting life in a foreign country is never easy. both os sides pros and cons.
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, it is positive than negative sides
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