Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. It would be a good idea to adopt this system, for men and possibly women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Military around the globe has set standards and it is mandatory to have a required height and a proper eye-sight to get selected. Many nations have forcefully started to recruit students who have finished school. And I disagree with
this
notion.
To begin
with, young adults when they complete their schooling they either plan to study
further
or take up a job If they are forced to join the armed services it can hamper their idea of being free.
Furthermore
, as per the set ,
standards
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some students might not be eligible to join in the
first
place but if they are forced to join they might not compete well enough.
For example
, a student of
a
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6ft in height can climb easily on a wall using rope, whereas a short guy with normal height can't climb as quickly as others.
This
can demotivate them and other adults might bully them for their inefficiency.
However
,
this
will not only demotivate them to progress
further
but
also
can impact their mental balance. To continue
further
, even if the above statements are true enrolling fresh graduates in the military can help to teach the important values of like discipline and respecting seniors but at the cost of their dreams. To exemplify,
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a student is a good dancer during his childhood
wants
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to pursue a career in dancing will have to join the military and sacrifice his dream of becoming a better dancer.
Moreover
, it is important for governments to actively participate in
this
discussion and take mindful decisions.
Lastly
, in my opinion, it would be wise to say that governments should open a military school in which students are taught about the country's safety from their childhood so that they have the same mentality while growing up and commit to said command willfully.
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  • Compulsory
  • Military service
  • Conscription
  • Patriotism
  • National security
  • Social equality
  • Discipline
  • Physical fitness
  • Life skills
  • Job training
  • Infringement
  • Conscripts
  • Gender equality
  • Mandatory
  • Economy
  • Education system
  • Labor market
  • Civil service
  • Alternative forms
  • Balanced view
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