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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #customs #behavior #host #country #differences
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Some
people
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 think that
tourists
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 in foreign
countries
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 should observe local
customs
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behavior
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. Some others dissent and say that
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destination
countries
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 should embrace distinct cultures. The
visitors
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 should be free in acting
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behavior
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 but must respect local
culture
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 and not act in the opposite way. Observing the local
customs
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 and
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behavior
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 of destination
countries
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 by
visitors
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 is considered as esteem to local
people
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. The residents of every
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 have special manners and lifestyles in their
culture
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, and some
behaviors
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 are restricted in their community.
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,
tourists
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 should follow their
customs
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 and
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behavior
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 to respect them as guests.
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, drinking alcohol is banned in Islamic
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 and if
tourists
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 want to drink it there, their act will be disrespectful
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behavior
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 to the host
country
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.
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, to entrance homes with shoes is indecent
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behavior
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 in some nations,
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to enter
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 their homes should take shoes off even though
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 custom does not exist in the
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’ life.
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, there are some
people
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 who have exactly the opposite opinion which is
tourists
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 should not follow the local
culture
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, because
tourists
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 have their own
culture
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, and they should not feel pressure in their travel to change their attitude which can be made an unsatisfying journey to them. Some others contend that the host state should accept distinctive cultures.
This
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 attitude toward
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 conveys the message that
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country
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 is flexible to different
people
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 and respects their
culture
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. So, more
people
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 will entice to visit the
country
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. In conclusion, in my opinion,
tourists
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’
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behavior
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 should not be in sharp contrast to local
people
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, and the destination
country
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 must give the right to its
visitors
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 to observe the
culture
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 they have to feel comfortable with being in another
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.
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, following local
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 is a polite manner for
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.
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, opening the door of the
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 to
people
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 with various
customs
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 can absorb more
tourists
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.
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