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The money spent by governments on space programs would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Generally, people believe that strengthening the public sector is necessary rather than funding
space
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 missions. I strongly disagree with it, because the government has to think long term for the betterment of people.
This
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 essay depicts the positives of
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 programs.
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 with, due to global warming pollution is increasing day by day, the sustainability of the present generation is not possible if not finding natural habitat in
space
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,
however
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, the government only have limited money for researching and implementing the idea,
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, the growth of the nation is only possible by launching
satellite
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a satellite
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 in the
space
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. All the developed countries have already started
space
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 tourism.
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, America
,
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 recently found life
in
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on
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moon
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the moon
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. On the behalf of
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this
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 they started real estate
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 the moon, surprisingly individuals are buying lands
in
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 the moon, by believing life
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 earth is not safe.
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, setting the
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benchmark
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bench mark
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benchmark
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 higher helps
the
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apply
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individuals to dream big. For an instance, India launched
Vikrant
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the Vikrant
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 engine
to
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into
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the
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space
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 in the year 2015, it is successful in the 1st attempt itself,
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this
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 eventually attracted lot many youngsters to the scientific team. To sum up, it is necessary for the government to spend more money and time
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space
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 research because
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 it helps the people and their upcoming generation to live free
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