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The world of work is changing so fast that employees cannot depend on having the same job or working conditions.  What are the possible causes for the rapid change, and what suggestions could be given for preparing people?

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The working
world
 is changing rapidly
that
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 workers cannot rely on having the same work or working surroundings. There are several reasons for
this
 phenomenon and I will provide advice that can help individuals prepare to meet challenges. There are types of reasons for
this
 working
world
 not being stable for today’s employees.
First
 of all, more and more factories use
technology
 equipment to replace
the
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human, which can reduce the cost of labour. What is more, the equipment
do
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need
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relax
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 time, so
that
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they can finish more products than that using human labour at the same time. Owing to
this
, many employees find themselves being laid off because their skills are replaced with machines or they have
a
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little knowledge
on
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 new
technology
.
In addition
 to that, most companies suffer from
economy
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 risks, and the growth of
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economic
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 has slowed down in many countries, which leads to them cutting their expenses and workers.
As a result
, many people have to lose their job because they
are
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lack
of
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competitive
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 in their working conditions. There is
introduction
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 that I can provide to help
worker
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workers
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 make themselves prepare for
this
 changing
world
. workers need to learn more knowledge about
technology
 to use it easily.
This
 can make them have another job in their familiar places if they are laid off. Meanwhile,
this
 ability
make
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 them
to
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be a person who cannot be replaced.
Which
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 means that their skill would not be replaceable and they may become the expert that their employers rely on.
Then
this
 skill can enhance their
competitive
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 in their company, which can prevent them are laid off. All in all,
technology
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technological
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 machines are
major
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a major
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 reason for
working
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the working
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world
 changing rapidly, people can learn how to use it well to protect their job or working conditions.
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