Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the workers, but not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

the vast majority of
job
person
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people
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may
work
at
home
utilising
the
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modern devices. but some
people
argue that it advantages only the workers, but not the
job
person.I
m
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strongly agree with the statement. in
this
essay should give your personal opinion and
support
your opinion
as well
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with examples.
To begin
with, Most of the
people
agreed with
this
idea.
Firstly
,I would like to outline the major benefits
is
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most of the
employees
are doing online
job
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jobs
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by using technology
such
as
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is
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less
time consuming
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for them.
In other words
, All
employees
can save most of the
time
and kill
traveling
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time
.
For instance
,After ,covid many
employees
are doing online jobs
by
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with
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modern technology.
Moreover
, There
is
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are
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several reasons
of
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to
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support
this
idea because it
also
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is also
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cheaper for the
employees
to
work
from
home
.All
people
who
working
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from
home
is
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are
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cheapest
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the cheapest
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for them. They
donot
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do not
don't
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to get ready every
mornimg
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morning
for
work
purpose
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purposes
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.
Forr
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example, In recent
last
people
went to jobs and
get
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up to date
while
going to
job
also
get
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dress
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up as well.
On the other hand
,Some
people
argue that it
only
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useful for the worker but not for
employees
. because
employees
didn't get that environment in a
home
but it's beneficial to the workers.
although
, everybody gets distracted by their families. To illustrate,when I was doing the online
job
so
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it
quite
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was quite
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difficult for me to
work
from
home
.
furthermore
, I would like to outline that
work
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from
home
is not an easy deal for the
employees
because
people
doesn't
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don't
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have the
support
of their office mates.
In other words
,
people
doesn't
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don't
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have teamwork
work
by working
in
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at
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home
.
For example
, many
people
get
support
from colleagues in their office but working from
home
it
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is impossible.
To sum up
, The vast majority of
people
think that working from
home
in the modern era makes life easier for
employees
. But some
people
believe that
it
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it is
it was
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only useful for the worker not for the
employees
.I
m
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agreed
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with the statement due it saves travelling
time
and cheapest as well .
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