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Some people thinks the university should accept equal numbers of males and females student in every subject. Others believe it is unacceptable policy. Discuss both of views and give your opinion.

#people #university #numbers #males #females #student #policy
In
such
 a 4.0 era, everyone is pursuing to have a suitable occupation which leads to
a
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 concept that the quantity of sex ratio is unnecessary to be balanced in any
subjects
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 in an institution. While there
also
 has a theory of egalitarianism believed to support
gender
 equality in every aspect include including education. From my standpoint, I strongly believed that students in university had better choose their major regardless of
gender
.
Firstly
, It is indisputable that more and more students
enroll
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 in university, but no one can control how many males or females will register in a specific subject. University education should be based on talent and through
their
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endeavor
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 as well as their performance.
In addition
, not all of them are equally interested in a concrete major, they have their own choices.
For instance
, some careers like drivers or firemen are undeniable, not appropriate for females, as well as
they
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 show less interest.
On the other hand
, women get priority in some jobs like a nurse, babysitters, and preschool teachers,… As a consequence, we must respect
student’s
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students’
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 wishes and merit in order not to deprive their chance, and freedom to become beneficial citizens.
Secondly
,
gender
 equality can
also
 bring a myriad of stupendous effects. It easily cut down the situation of devoiding
laubour
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labour
 in the specific job;
therefore
, stable sources of workers are always available which can guarantee the development of one’s organization. That concept may become pivotal in some aspects but in my perspective, It does not provide well-training workers at all. In conclusion, to sophisticated, developed and industrialized world runs on the wheels of education,
as a result
, both
gender
 had better
to
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decide their own life based on their aptitude as well as passion,
therefore
, they can easily be responsible for their survival in
the
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such
competitive
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a competitive
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 era.
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