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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While some
people
 think that
students
 in university should study whatever they choose and want, others are of the opinion that they should not be able to choose something other than subjects that will be useful in the
future
,
such
 as those associated
to
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 science and technology. In my point of view, depriving
students
from
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of
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 the choice related to their
future
 education and occupation is not humanely. Both sides will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand,
this
 kind of obligation for
students
 in university may be turned into
contribution
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a contribution
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 not only
for
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to
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 society
,
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 but
also
for
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to
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future
 development.
Reason
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 behind
this
 is that subjects like science and technology are one of the main things in the education sphere.
In
addition
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,addition
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 it is vital
studies
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to study
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 without which humanity became extinct. To give
illustration
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, science includes medicine, and without
medicine
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,medicine
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 there is no chance for
people
 to survive.
On the other hand
, nobody in the world has the right to deprive
people
from
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of
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 what they like to do within the law.
Furthermore
, professions
such
 as architecture,
designer
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,
psychologist
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psychology
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 and even postman are vital for society. Because they
also
 contribute to society’s
future
.
For instance
, without
architectures
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architecture
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people
 would not be able to live in good apartments, without psychologists
people
 would not be able to cope with stress, and even without
postman
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a postman
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people
’s parcels would not be delivered right to the door of the house. In conclusion,
students
 in the university have
virtuousness
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the virtuousness
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 to study whatever they like.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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