some people belive that it is best to except a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. discuss both views and give your own oppinion.

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some consider that it is better to accept a
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which is bad
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as an unsuitable
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while
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others think that it is important to improve the
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.I believe that it is more important to improve the
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rather than
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with the flow. On the one hand,some
people
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except
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the
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whether they are not happy with the
job
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or the shortage of money because there could be no other options.
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,
people
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need to provide for
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their
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their
families even if the
situation
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is not in their favour.
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,during the covid 19 pandemic,
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had to struggle and look for even a
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part time
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or any
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of
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to cater for their families.
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,they were paid less compared to their normal jobs but
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they had to accept that
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and
work
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since
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was no alternative option.
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,some families are huge,and most of the members are children so eventually the parents have to
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to feed their children even if the pay is not that much.
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, some try to
to
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improve the
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by doing extra shifts or a totally new
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.
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,pulling extra hours in the evening apart from the normal hours or
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covering a workmate's shift or
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doing
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entirely new
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extra
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for a different organization.In
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way
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they get to overcome the shortage of cash.
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,most
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people
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the people
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who have a large family and the members are eligible to
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,so all
work
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and contribute to the family so by applying
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strategies the problem of shortage of cash is minimised. In conclusion,it is a difficult task to accept a bad
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when there is
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no
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an
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option but it is more important to
work
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hard and thrive for the best
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