Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead in developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, and solar energy. Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answers
It is considered by some individuals that
energy
generated from nuclear sources Use synonyms
are
more harmful than other Correct subject-verb agreement
is
forms
and should be prohibited. I agree with Use synonyms
this
because nuclear Linking Words
energy
can cause sickness and the Use synonyms
power
generated from it can be uncontrollable.
One reason why other Use synonyms
forms
of Use synonyms
energy
other than nuclear Use synonyms
power
should be used is that nuclear Use synonyms
energy
can cause illness. Nuclear Use synonyms
energy
in its mode of generation and transmission releases some Use synonyms
radiations
. These radiations affect the body negatively causing sicknesses. Fix the agreement mistake
radiation
For example
, the first time radiation from nuclear Linking Words
energy
came in contact with human beings, it caused some form of defects in babies. Use synonyms
This
nuclear Linking Words
power
has lots of unconcluded ongoing studies to determine the extent of the dangers it Use synonyms
cause
. Change the verb form
causes
This
factor makes it unsuitable for use in our daily activities as it is unsafe.
Another point to consider is that nuclear Linking Words
energy
can be difficult to curtail. By Use synonyms
this
I mean, Linking Words
Linking Words
this
Correct word choice
that this
energy
form is usually in Use synonyms
form
of gas. Correct article usage
the form
This
quality Linking Words
furthermore
makes it difficult to control when it is released. The other Linking Words
forms
of Use synonyms
energy
are in more tangible Use synonyms
forms
. Use synonyms
For instance
, the whole world can be brought to its Linking Words
knee
if a country with nuclear Fix the agreement mistake
knees
power
releases it into the atmosphere. Use synonyms
This
is because the effect will be so muchLinking Words
as
no one is able to control it when it is released.
In conclusion, I think people should be stopped from using nuclear Correct word choice
that
energy
because it causes sickness and Use synonyms
it
is difficult to control once released.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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Task Response
Please provide a clearer introduction and conclusion to your essay. Your main points are not well supported and lack sufficient detail. Make sure to include relevant examples to support your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay needs a more logical structure to help the reader follow your arguments easily. Pay attention to the organization of your ideas within paragraphs and throughout the essay. Additionally, your introduction and conclusion need to be more clearly presented. Aim for a more cohesive and coherent structure.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite