Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead in developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, and solar energy. Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answers
It is considered by some individuals that
energy
generated from nuclear sources are
more harmful than other Correct subject-verb agreement
is
forms
and should be prohibited. I agree with this
because nuclear energy
can cause sickness and the power
generated from it can be uncontrollable.
One reason why other forms
of energy
other than nuclear power
should be used is that nuclear energy
can cause illness. Nuclear energy
in its mode of generation and transmission releases some radiations
. These radiations affect the body negatively causing sicknesses. Fix the agreement mistake
radiation
For example
, the first time radiation from nuclear energy
came in contact with human beings, it caused some form of defects in babies. This
nuclear power
has lots of unconcluded ongoing studies to determine the extent of the dangers it cause
. Change the verb form
causes
This
factor makes it unsuitable for use in our daily activities as it is unsafe.
Another point to consider is that nuclear energy
can be difficult to curtail. By this
I mean, this
Correct word choice
that this
energy
form is usually in form
of gas. Correct article usage
the form
This
quality furthermore
makes it difficult to control when it is released. The other forms
of energy
are in more tangible forms
. For instance
, the whole world can be brought to its knee
if a country with nuclear Fix the agreement mistake
knees
power
releases it into the atmosphere. This
is because the effect will be so much as
no one is able to control it when it is released.
In conclusion, I think people should be stopped from using nuclear Correct word choice
that
energy
because it causes sickness and it
is difficult to control once released.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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