People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The
amount
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of people who utilises
credit
cards
to
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their monthly expenditures increased. In my point of view
disadvantages
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outweighs
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advantages
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the advantages
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.
This
essay will include several reasons to support
this
opinion. For
people
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it is hard to take over the things which
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do
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is
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it
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does not belong to
him
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them
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. When
customer
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a customer
the customer
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of the
bank
get
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gets
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a
credit
card
he may think that
bank
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the bank
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giving him
a
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free
money
and he goes to spend all of them. Misunderstanding
this
simple concept is that you do not get free
money
anywhere if there
is
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are
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some options
then
know It will not
last
long.
Bank
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giving
customer
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a customer
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credit
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a credit
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card
approves his solvent and logically
this
means that
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the user
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user
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of
credit
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a credit
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card
has to pay back what he spent.
Otherwise
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if he is not capable to do it
bank
just
do
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does
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not give him
credit
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a credit
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card
.
Consequently
not recognising
this
plain idea leads to certain issues.
First
and foremost it is illusion. When
individual
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have
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has
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unlimited
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an unlimited
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amount of
money
that can
be expend
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be expended
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to
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anything it may bring
illusion
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an illusion
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which will give him
feeling
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the feeling
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that everything will be ok and all
this
money
that he has to pay back disappear in some magical way. He starts buying whatever he wants but he overlooks that
in
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the end of the month there will be a bill which must be repaid.
Moreover
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bank
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banks
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can add require more
money
than they actually provide you,
for
instance
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it could be caused by percentages. In
conclusion
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I want to say that every person should spend only
those
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amount of
money
that he actually has in the
bank
account.
Therefore
at least you will not have debts which makes you
free
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a free
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person to compare with the one who lives in the “illusion”
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cashless transactions
  • Financial footprint
  • Interest rates
  • Credit score
  • Consumerism
  • Debt accumulation
  • Expenditure tracking
  • Fraudulent activities
  • Overspending
  • Purchase protection
  • Revolving credit
  • Creditworthiness
  • Impulse buying
  • Secured credit card
  • Unsecured credit card
  • Spending limit
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