Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether doing the same thing is best or
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is best sparked a lot of
discussion
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these days. While some people believe that
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doing the same thing is good for their family security, I agree with those who believe that
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of
work
pays more and broadens their thinking. On the one hand, supporters of
this
view believe that
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processing a steady life is more likely to have positive aspects.
To begin
with, doing the same thing makes a person expert in that
work
.
Hence
they no need to attend special training frequently to update new things periodically.
Secondly
, performing the same task daily is easy to follow. after a certain time which becomes your routine
work
.
However
, I side with those who believe that taking
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risk is the
first
step
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progress.
Furthermore
, people usually miss chances when they do not take risks in life.
Secondly
,
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a change
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in
work
or profession broadens the mind and thinking of any individual. and
also
it increases the creativity of the individual. In conclusion,
although
doing the same
work
makes any individual an expert in that field, I believe that those who
change
their field
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their mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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