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Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places.

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Some
people
 prefer to live in only
one
 area and stay blissfully happy, while other
people
 like regularly changing their homes. Overall, as we know there are two types of
people
, who prefer to live and grow in
one
 space and others like moving and exchanging living places. In my own opinion, It is good to grow only in
one
place
, because there are lots of memories, but if someone moves every time, so they are more amiable with new
neighbours
. It is clear that a big number of
people
 prefer to live in
one
place
.
For instance
 in Uzbekistan citizens want to
choose
Add the particle
tochoose
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 live in
one
 space, because everyone will remind, become bored and love the
place
 where they lived all time.
One
 word is "memory" of a favourite
place
. A large number of
people
 would like to move and move to new places to live.
For example
 in Russia, the USA and in Europe communities like to do so. There are two reasons.
Firstly
, the same
people
 develop and become adopted to everything faster than
people
 who like living in
one
 space. It is good, because ,in some accidents or emergencies, everyone can adapt to everything without some "surprises" with
neighbours
 or climate. The
second
 reason is as I mentioned relationships among
neighbours
. Recent statistics demonstrated that "regularly moving
people
" are more amiable and mercifully with new
neighbours
. It means that changing placements is more positive than sitting in four types of wool. Eventually,
people
 who prefer to live in
one
place
, are more memorable, while regular moving is
also
 useful to contact with all types person's behaviour.
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