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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The given diagram details the
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 of producing
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 from
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 cane. Overall, the manufacturing
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 of
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 cane involves seven steps. The
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 of
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canes
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 contains many steps including growing the
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, harvesting and crushing them. We may divide
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 into two groups using the diagram:
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 done by people and
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 done by machines. The
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step
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 is the
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 of growing
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 cane, which lasts from 12 to 18 months. In the
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, the
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 is handled by
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 and
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. In the
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, the
sugar
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canes
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 are crushed through the machine. Juice is a product of crushing
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 through the machine. In the fourth
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, the juice is purified through the limestone filer. In the evaporator, the heated juice becomes
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syrup. In the sixth
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, the centrifuge is responsible for dividing
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 crystals from
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 crystals from the centrifuge create the
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. In the final
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, the given
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sugar
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 is dried and cooled for its
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