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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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The given diagram details the
process
 of producing
sugar
 from
sugar
 cane. Overall, the manufacturing
process
 of
sugar
 cane involves seven steps. The
process
 of
sugar
canes
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cane
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,
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 contains many steps including growing the
canes
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, harvesting and crushing them. We may divide
work
 into two groups using the diagram:
work
 done by people and
work
 done by machines. The
first
step
 is the
process
 of growing
sugar
 cane, which lasts from 12 to 18 months. In the
next
step
, the
work
 is handled by
machine
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 and
human
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humans
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. In the
third
step
, the
sugar
canes
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cane
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 are crushed through the machine. Juice is a product of crushing
sugar
canes
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 through the machine. In the fourth
step
, the juice is purified through the limestone filer. In the evaporator, the heated juice becomes
a
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syrup. In the sixth
step
, the centrifuge is responsible for dividing
sugar
 crystals from
syrup
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.
Finally
, the
sugar
 crystals from the centrifuge create the
sugar
. In the final
step
, the given
product-
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sugar
 is dried and cooled for its
further
 usage.
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