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Nowadays, a large amount of advertising is aimed at children, so some people think there are lots of negative effects on children, and should ban it. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Advertisement is key to consumerism in today's world.In recent times many
advertisements
 are targeted at
children
 and can affect the child in either positive or negative ways. In
this
 essay , the pros and cons of advertising will be discussed and arrive at the conclusion that the negative effects are far greater.
Advertisements
 these days are catchy and capture the attention of the younger age group easily.They become aware of the recent
products
 in the market that might help them perform better in their studies or leisure.
Children
 are
also
 able to keep on par with the recent trends by watching these commercials. Many
also
 fear the negative effects these commercial
advertisements
 can have on
children
. Cosmetic
products
 in a way force
children
 to meet a certain beauty standard ,failing which they end up with low self-esteem.
Children
 are unable to discern what
products
 are useful or important for them and end up forcing their parents to spend on
products
. The psychological impact of certain
advertisements
 cannot be ignored, it tends to advocate aggression as a sign of strength, beauty as a means of acceptance, valuable possession as a symbol of growth and so on. To conclude, I believe that the negative effects of advertising outweigh its positive effect. A censor board should be in place to control the content of the
advertisements
 aimed at
children
 or even better ban them.
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