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As computers translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign languages is a waste of time? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#computers #languages #waste #time
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Nowadays
people
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 benefit from using online translation platforms to communicate with foreigners.
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 visitors become capable
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 their needs on trips, it has been proven that some misunderstandings
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. I agree with the statement to some extent. Learning a
language
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 assists
people
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 to understand other cultures and make closer relationships with locals. For more explanation, being able to
talk
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speak
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 a similar
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with
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 the host countries’
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 us with an opportunity to be aware of historical stories and communicate easily.
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, it is undeniable that the internet is not accessible for using translators’ applications everywhere, so
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 command of an international
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 would be more reliable.
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, on my
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 trip to Turkey, I decided to learn quite a bit about the Turkish
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 and
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 action gave me the confidence to get to know exotic
people
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, learn about them, and find new friends.
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, learning a
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 is an effective way to increase our general information about the world and it helps us to make a bigger circle of friends. Online translation platforms get individuals a chance to travel all around the world without knowing all countries’ mother languages.
People
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 have to take a long time to master a foreign
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 and it seems out of human capacity to learn many languages,
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this
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 kind of application simplifies
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 process for them.
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, most computers are programmed to translate whatever we want immediately without mistakes.
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, tourists should apply an instant translation system when they want to visit countries
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 as China, Japan, or France. So, these high-tech platforms have their advantages and make
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 easier for passengers.
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, learning
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 skills allows for closer contact with
people
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 from other nations with different cultures,
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 it seems translators are proper just to satisfy our needs.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and supports it effectively with examples and explanations.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt in detail and provide a clear opinion supported by relevant arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Computers are proficient in certain domains but struggle with complex language nuances
  • Machine translation lacks human touch and may not capture context accurately
  • Learning a foreign language is a valuable investment in personal development
  • Language learning fosters empathy and appreciation for different cultures
  • Multilingual individuals are in high demand in the job market
  • Acquiring new languages expands one's horizons and opens doors to new opportunities
  • Bilingualism enhances cognitive flexibility and problem-solving abilities
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