IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes #charity #neighbourhood #sports #children
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The liner
chat
Correct your spelling
chart
show examples
 displays
an
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 average
emissions
Use synonyms
 of
carbon
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 per population in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. Overall, it is shown that
carbon
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
emissions
Use synonyms
 increased gradually in Italy and Portugal, whereas in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom and Sweden,
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
 decreased steadily over time. Despite the decreasing trend of CO2
emissions
Use synonyms
 in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom, its
figure
Use synonyms
 remained the highest among other countries.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the
emisson
Correct your spelling
emission
emissions
 of
carbon
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 was the lowest in Portugal, at approximately 1 metric
Use synonyms
tonnes
Change to a singular noun
tonne
show examples
 in 1967, which rose gradually
around
Change preposition
to around
show examples
 5 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 over the
ten year
Add a hyphen
ten-year
show examples
 period, and slightly stayed constant till 2007. Even though the
figure
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
emissions
Use synonyms
 increased, it remained the lowest in
this
Linking Words
 country among all till the end of the period.
Moreover
Linking Words
, in 1967, Italy had the
second
Linking Words
 lowest
carbon
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 emission rate of about 4.2 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
, which inclined sharply to above 6
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in the following year.
This
Linking Words
then
Linking Words
 increased over time to 8 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
, becoming
Linking Words
second-highest
Correct article usage
the second-highest
show examples
 among others.
United
Correct article usage
The United
show examples
 States emitted
largest
Correct article usage
the largest
show examples
carbon
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the start of the period at about 11 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and declined gradually to 8 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2007, before falling down, the
figure
Use synonyms
 remained stable from 1967 to 1977.
In contrast
Linking Words
 ,
carbon
Use synonyms
emission
Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
show examples
 in Sweden fluctuated over time, starting with above 8
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and increasing up to
Correct your spelling
almost
at most
atmost
Correct your spelling
at most
 10 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 1977,
this
Linking Words
 dropped significantly and
then
Linking Words
 kept on decreasing gradually reaching to
similar
Add an article
the similar
a similar
show examples
figure
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 Portugal in 2007.
Submitted by nottasadaf96 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
What to do next:
Look at other essays: