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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Have a conviction that
high
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a high
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 level of
salary
better
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is better
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 than to
have
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tohave
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 enjoy from
work
. I do not agree with
opinion
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the opinion
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 that big payment is more powerful and prevails over pleasure from
job
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a job
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. In
this
 essay, I will try to convey my position on
this
 topic. I think
,
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apply
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 it is better for people to care about enjoying their
work
, and not about a high
salary
. As a matter of fact,
work
 is a daily routine, and if we do not want our life to turn into constant stress, we must be satisfied with our
work
. For me, the overall level of happiness depends on job satisfaction. In my opinion, the feeling of pleasure from
work
 has a number of advantages.
First
, it gives people the opportunity to use their skills and knowledge.
Moreover
, it gives the feeling that their
work
 is important.
Secondly
,
favorite
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favourite
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work
 allows
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one to
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to achieve
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achieving
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 self-realization. A person can develop his abilities and talents.
Thirdly
, some people dream of helping others and giving something positive to society. I believe that it is possible to combine a lovely job and a big
salary
. In fact, there is a lot of truth that a high
salary
 means a wide range of financial opportunities.
However
, we can hardly be completely satisfied with our lives, having all these expensive things. Enjoying what you love makes our lives better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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