A persons worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

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a symbolic gestures
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for a happier
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in the current time of every individual's
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. A man is known by his financial status,
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meanwhile
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the factor of nobelium is
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dependent on materialistic things
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claim
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by someone. In my perspective, ethical
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and moral codes play a significant role in
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human
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significance of our assets, cash value and so cold glamour-based social circle. People are more into prevent their selves by displaying their money, and property which could be inherited by their
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ancestors.
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, our new generation
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to follow many media-based iconic
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who
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fame on the base of their luxurious big villas, expensive sports cars and precious eye-catching jewellery wear. Even they have no manners about how to talk with elders and younger as well as they are
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unaware of moral
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. On the flip side, people are struggling to get a prominent person in their society while they lost gold in search of diamonds. Love, kindness, and respect are those
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which make a human body
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a vital person, but ,
unfortunately
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society left behind all of these habits for just being an icon of their group. Parents should flourish their children in an environment of old-fashioned
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where they grow up as
an innocent human beings
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. For ,instance our grandparents always taught us to give respect our elders whilst showing love for
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younger
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, we should never forget to follow
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path
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we will be lost our traditional ethical
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. In conclusion,
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firmly stand with
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stance, old-fashioned
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are more important than our wealth. ,
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we cannot ignore the significance of material things. The appropriate way of living a balanced
life
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is to manage both of them.
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