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person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness, and trust, no longer seem important.

#person’s #status #possessions #values #honor #kindness #trust
Although
 many
people
 believe that these days an individual's worth is considered by
its
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 status in
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society and
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 bank balance,
whereas
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values
 like integrity and trust
never
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 been taken into account. I am inclined to firmly concur with
this
 assertion that
values
 are not
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considered important. The essay will justify my inclination in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly
, the strongest one to prove my view is a materialistic approach adopted by society in order to assess
the
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 person's stature.
This
 is because many
people
 in the community have different
interest
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 associated with that individual, especially in developing countries where
the
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money is given importance.
For example
, in Pakistan society, political leaders are elected based on wealth, status and power.
Secondly
, the poverty ratio,
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is on the rise. Owing to
this
, many poor
people
 indulge in the inferiority complex and the
Feudalist
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 use their wealth and social contacts to put them under their influence. To illustrate, Punjab Police in Pakistan is used by the feudal to exert pressure on the opponents and poor
people
 to make them realize their social contact and power.
Besides
this
, the trend of nuclear families is growing in
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urban cities and there is an absence of older
people
 in the families who can teach children about the
values
, norms, and ethics of living in the communities.
Furthermore
, parents spend less time with their children and more time at work to meet the needs of the family,
therefore
, children and young
people
 are deprived of learning important life lessons. Through my own experience, I have seen that parents busy with multiple jobs tend to give less attention at home and the quality time to teach these
values
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 priority. To conclude the aforementioned, I am predisposed to argue that societies are considering
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wealth and social power to judge a person's status and neglecting the imperative social norms and
values
 which is detrimental to the community at large.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Materialism
  • Social status
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honor
  • Kindness
  • Integrity
  • Consumerism
  • Superficiality
  • Ephemeral
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Altruism
  • Narcissism
  • Humility
  • Empathy
  • Ethics
  • Moral compass
  • Minimalist
  • Contentment
  • Material possessions
  • Status symbol
  • Wealth disparity
  • Moral bankruptcy
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