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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are two opinions about higher education. One part of people reason
that is
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 university
students
 can choose any subject,
which
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they want.
Second
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 part insists that
students
 should
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 only these subjects
what
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that
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 they will use in the future
especially
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 science and technology. I am more close to the
last
 suggestion.
However
, I think it is important to understand the benefits and disadvantages of each position, so I propose to discuss them in
this
 essay. If says about
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 opinion about a form of studies, it has one great advantage – the freedom of choice. The student has a right to learn his
favorite
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favourite
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 disciplines, and in
this
 case, studies will be for him more easy and
pleasant
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.
On the other hand
 the student as usual a younger person, and at
this
 age, he cannot understand what subject he is really needed and for
this
 reason make a mistake in
this
 choice.
For example
, future lawyers have huge kinds of law
for
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 study – civil, tax, criminal and many others. And it is really hard to understand what kind you need. I agree that
students
 should study subjects that will be useful in the future.
This
 approach helps to
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the
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time and give
the
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 understanding
about
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studies’ way
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studies
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. Another advantage
for
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this
 way of education is to have
the
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a
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 plan
of
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for
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 the studying process.
For example
, potential engineers will understand that they practice physics, chemistry, math and other science. In
conclusion
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 there is a rivalry between two opinions and each of them can pretend on a number of followers. Part of them
agree
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 with
position
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the position
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 that
students
 should choose
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their favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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 subjects. Most of them believe that every student needs to have
the
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a
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 useful education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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