fewer and fewer young people are choosing to become a teacher. Why do young people do not want to become teachers? How could this be changed?

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nowadays the count of university graduates who desires to become an educator is rapidly declining.
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a teacher because teaching someone, specifically kids and teenagers embraces wider challenges. Fortunately, some,
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ways are available for providing the solution.
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these wages have to depend on teachers' abilities and enthusiasm. Increasing the wage while considering these advantages, youngers will be brave for choosing
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percentage of young people are ignoring
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