Question: More and more people are using the internet to do their tasks rather than in person (e.g. banking, shopping, hotel booking, etc.). Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people use the net to do their duties
instead
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of
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. Activities
such
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as booking, renting, shopping or medical care are going to be
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mentioned
mentionated
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mentioned
in
this
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essay as
a different instances
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. I strongly believe that the advantages of
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technology outweigh the disadvantages. It is well known that society has
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more and more technologically
by
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years
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the years
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. Tasks
such
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as going shopping or receiving the wage by cheque or cash have changed to online shopping and online bank accounts.
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, all these advances are not well-view by many elderly people, who sometimes are unable to keep up, because they
borned
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burned
born
in a century where every
currently
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advances were unknown. For
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intance
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instance
, if senior citizens want to go to the pharma to pick up their medication, they will need
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national insurance card, in which the doctor had to put their personal receipt before,
to
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may buy their pills. Another example could be when they try to
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their own money
for
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from
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the bank due to often they could not do it by themselves, feeling like a burden.
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, there exist a lot of advantages of doing
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tasks using the internet rather than in person. The net is the
most fast
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fastest
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communication system that we have
never
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ever
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know
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. It
is allows
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allows
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the population to do their duties faster than some years ago.
In addition
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,
internet
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the internet
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is so safe and if you have any problem
on
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it,
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professional
proffesional
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professional
workers could find it in a few seconds.
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, if a hacker has
stole
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your identity, your bank can
blocked
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your account and track your money to keep it safe. To conclude, I firmly think that the advantages of
internet
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outweigh the disadvantages.
Although
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elderly people have some little difficulties with it,
the
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technology
have
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changed our view of life.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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