Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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at school. In fact,

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to learn deeper different structures and creations.

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different Technologies develop day by day,

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are very important in our modern

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and so on.

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we have modern and vital medicines, which save people's lives. In conclusion,

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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