In many countries people have to go away from their family and friends to find the work. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays,
Jobs
opportunities will decline in some nations and individuals will go away from their family and friends to search a high-paid Change the noun form
Job
work
. There are a few advantages and disadvantages as well I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
,with the advantages, In this
modern world technology is advancing day by day and poor regions will not develop and their new youths will prefer to go to work
outside of their country. In other words
, These days jobs will require high qualifications instead
of job experience for their employees because they need to grow their company value and they hire new workers from other countries such
as Africa. For example
, In south
Correct your spelling
in South
Africa
news channels reveal headlines their citizens have a lot of jobs offered by other worlds and they will go to their tasks and they will forget their families and it has an effect on their nation and community. Add a comma
Africa,
Thus
, It is important to work
for everyone but it doesn't mean they will ignore their past supporters such
as guardians.
To commence with the disadvantages, It affects their region's economy because their younger workers think they will not responsible
for their development and it will affect their nations. To explain, Their own regional company will not Add a missing verb
be responsible
support
by their society Wrong verb form
be supported
due to
they will be
interested Rephrase
not be
to
Change preposition
in working
work
abroad and they will not have any feelings for their home country and it huge impact on their state's recession. For instance
, In the UK authority will declare that their new individual will not be permitted to work
far away from their family and they will introduce new rules such
as Families every person will follow this
law it is good for their nation and society. Hence
, It is good to work
for their home country because they will increase their region's growth.
In conclusion, Although
it is an essential part of life to connect with family and friends and
it is good to Correct word choice
apply
work
on their own. Moreover
, it is not good to complete tasks outside of nations because it will affect family emotions.Submitted by razab5469 on
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