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What UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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The charts show information about the destination of
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
 in the UK after they left college. Overall, what stands out from the 2 graphs is that the majority of graduates and postgraduate
students
 opted for
further
 studies and the least number of
students
 goes for voluntary work. Looking into the details, We can clearly see that around 29665
graduate
students
 and 2725 postgraduate
students
 go for higher studies after leaving the colleges in the UK.
Similarly
, if we talk about the
next
 option for these
students
then
 about 17735
graduate
students
 and about 2535 postgraduate
students
 prefer part-time jobs once they finish their education. Unemployment is
also
 a key factor in the lives of
students
 who left college. If we check for unemployment than16235
graduate
students
 and 1625 postgraduate
students
 are unemployed.
On the other hand
, the Least number of
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
 choose to
voluntary
Add a missing verb
do voluntary
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 work after leaving college and
that is
 3500 and 345
students
 respectively. In both graphs destinations of graduates and postgraduates
students
 almost behave in a similar manner and show approximately the same trend.
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