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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibility. Do you agree or disagree ?

#money #businesses #responsibility
This
 issue of whether
business
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businesses
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have
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has
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 a responsibility
to wards
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towards
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society
 is
open
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 debate. I partly agree that companies should have
duty
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a duty
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 to
society
. On the one hand, one of the
culprist
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culprits
culprit
 is that,
first
, a
company
 have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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society
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to society
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 will attract the good attention of many people,
that is
can
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an
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 building
an
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the
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 image of the
business
. To be more precise
that is
 the
company
 will advertise for more
than
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people to know about their products.
For
example
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 Vinamilk helps children on
highlands
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the highlands
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 by proving their products
such
 as every year.
As a result
, Vinamilk
have
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has
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 more than
milions
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millions
million
children
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of children
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know
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known
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to
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about
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this
business
. Research has shown that the more companies do
this
, the stronger
society
 will become.
On the other hand
, the reason behind
this
 is that a small
business
have
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has
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alow
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a low
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 capital
should
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and should
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 try to focus
to
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on
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 paying
worker's
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workers'
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 wages.
In addition
,
business
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the business
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 has to pay taxes every year, which lead to the request for more responsibilities from them to the public could be too much. As an illustration, if a small
business
 on the
company
's revenue can create a lot of jobs for the
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labour
lobor
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labour
 market.
Besides
, the
business
 can
a
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balance the
company
's finances
that
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in that
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is do
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does
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 not lead to financial high risk. The result of
this
 is that the
business
 can
paying
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pay
be paying
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 more than
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taxes
texes
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the texes
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 for
government
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the government
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 and indirectly helps
society
. In conclusion, businesses have social responsibility
it
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apply
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very well, but each
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other
orther
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other
company
 should try to balance
betweem
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between
 revenue of
company
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the company
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 and
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responsibility
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the reponsibility
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reponsibility
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responsibility
society
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of society
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.
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