In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
It has been shown that people love to travel in their holidays and some argue that most individuals will opt destination in their own country
instead
of going to another nation. Not only it has saved the expenses of travelling but also
it avoids communication problems of location. In this
essay, I completely agreed
with the above, and that has been elaborated on in the Wrong verb form
agree
looming
paragraphs.
Correct word choice
following
Firstly
, the cost of travel which has been borne by travellers during their trip will get
reduced Verb problem
be
much
. A trip abroad Rephrase
greatly
required
a visa, and that has some fee which gets charged from the destination country. Wrong verb form
requires
For instance
, travelling to Canada, required
a tourist visa Wrong verb form
requires
and
Correct word choice
apply
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
cost
around 100 dollars. Correct subject-verb agreement
costs
Furthermore
, the charges of hotels in abroad places are mostly high as compared to the native nation, such
as services
charges and taxes are different everywhere, and owing to Fix the agreement mistake
service
this
, it has more fees at those places. Therefore
, to save all this
extra money, humans will decide to tour their home region regards
of foreign.
Correct your spelling
regardless
Secondly
, many individuals have a communication problem, it has been seen in many countries where their citizens are more comfortable in their home language. if they don't know other languages, and planning to abroad that will lead them to much trouble communicating with locals. For example
, in ,India more than 28 languages have been spoken by their citizens , and many don't know the other country's languages, they always prefer local trips. Clearly owing to this
issue, most will choose to make a trip inside the home state, despite moving abroad in holidays time.
In conclusion, travel brings lots of expenses and communication problems to travellers. I totally agree that people love to visit new places, they will choose to visit their own nations rather than go abroad.Submitted by ashishsingh333111 on
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