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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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punishment
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children
 to recognize what is
right
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 should do, and what is wrong, and
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 should prevent themselves to do. I would argue that
although
children
 should learn about wrong and
right
 things when they are young,
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I think
punishment
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the punishment
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 is not the proper way to help them to find the differences. In
this
 century, we have significant
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 in pedagogy methods. It is not like
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 centuries that
punishment
 was the only way to educate
children
 that what is
right
 or wrong. We should not restrict our teaching choices to negative methods; because they have remarkable consequences
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 generation. Parents and institutions should try to show kids
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why something is wrong or
right
 clearly with touchable examples to help them to select their choices. Adults and teaching
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 can use
encourage
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 for their strategy, which can have positive effects on
children
instead
 of
punishment
.
On the other hand
,
punishment
 has various negative consequences on young
children
.
First
 of all, adolescents
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loose
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 their
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. They become frightened and they can not select the
right
 decision, because they think it might be wrong and they would punish again.
Secondly
,
punishment
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system
 makes
children
 anxious and angry. Adolescents become nervous about their choices, and
also
 become aggressive; because they do not know what should they do to
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scape
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punishment
.
This
 pedagogy approach, reproduce the anger
system
 and does not help young
children
 to select
right
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 ways.
Finally
,
punishment
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system
 has worse effects on the relationship between the
children
 and the punisher; after
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, that child cannot rely on that person and
this
 is
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a disaster
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 at that age. In conclusion, I believe that in today’s society, we have many positive methods for teaching the
right
 way to our
children
; and
punishment
 is not
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and
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best choice.
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  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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