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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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Violation
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 caused by young adults
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 drastically rising in several nations.
This
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 on the account of multiple reasons which I will depict in
this
 imminent essay along with solutions. At the onset, majority of the youngsters are addicted
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 video games
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making them commit many sins. Because
majority
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 of the boys would love to play racing games on the account of
this
 when they get their
parents
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 car the young ones try to imitate the games and
causes
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 accidents.
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, recently
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 Bangalore express high way two cars go collapsed and the drivers
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 dead the video footage visualize that it happened because they try to do drag racing
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he
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 highway. Unexpectedly, one of the
driver
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 was under 18 years
of
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old. Since toddlers behave like they are
in
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 the racing track and forget
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reality
this
 is one of the major
cause
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for
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 increasing crime.
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, youngsters these days are found interested
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mainly
maily
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thriller yet action movies which are directly affecting the
individuals
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mind set
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. Since the actors in the movie find it
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their job yet all the stunt scenes are done with the safety and support from the crew before performing
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and all the time
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real
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one
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and certain computer
graphic
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 are used to modify the action sequences. Unfortunately, a set of teenagers find it real and try to perform the act in the society from the movies which they watched paves
way
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 towards social problems and
hence
 he might be sentenced to several legal
procedure
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.
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, after watching
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 movie Ayan in which the hero smuggled
diamond
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 from Africa a person tried to imitate the same,
instead
 of
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 he tried it with brown sugar
however
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, he was caught. People find illegal exports as
easy
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money making
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 options by watching films and
do
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 it in real life which is another factor. The solution for
this
 is difficult
nevertheless
,
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educating
the
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individuals about the reality of life and the virtual life
by
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 parents and teachers will help to solve the problem to
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 certain
extend
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. To conclude, visual communication
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 are the major cause
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 the problems happening in most
of
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the countries
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