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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#universities #colleges #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
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Nowadays
students
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 do not have to go to school, because
distance
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 learning from the Internet is quite normal and can be provided by universities and colleges. From my perspective, the merits of the development outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, it is beneficial for
students
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 to
study
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 from home.
Students
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 of
distance
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 learning are able to feel freer. After class, they can arrange their own schedule, which they want to do rather than under the supervision of tutors.
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 learning
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 more likely to encourage
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 to
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on
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 their own pace.
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, there is plenty of information that they can search for or teachers’
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videos
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 that they can be watched again
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 the Internet
,
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 when they are confused
in
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 studying.
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 the contrary, admission would not take a class about the same content again.
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,
students
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 who
study
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 from home can save money and time on transport. They can take advantage of time on transport to do some sports or trivial things to improve their efficiencies.
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,
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, especially international
students
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, can
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 at universities or colleges that are located in other parts of the world during the pandemic.
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, Spending too much time in terms of
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 learning is not likely to help
students
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 to develop good learning habits. They may be easily distracted from studying without any supervision. In conclusion, it is convenient for
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 to
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 from home because of the widespread use of the Internet.
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students
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’ feelings are crucial as well . Perhaps they feel isolated due to long-term
distance
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 learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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