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Some people like to try new new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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Many enjoy
to live
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living
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 their
life
 gaining new experiences by trying out something new whereas others choose to do familiar activities. How to spend their
life
 is a subjective thing but it reflects
attitude
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their attitude
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 towards
life
. Both
the
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perspectives will be discussed
further
 before giving my opinion. Extroverts mostly believe that
life
’s best lessons are learnt by living them and
thus
 they don’t hesitate much in exploring new things in
life
. Often
this
 kind of
people
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person
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love
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loves
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 adventures, may it be of trying out new dishes or a new sport. One of the benefits of
this
 kind of lifestyle is that they get to meet many interesting
people
, explore many unexplored places and have many stories to tell. They can handle
challenges
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 of
life
 with much more creative solutions.
On the other hand
,
people
 who prefer to do known activities than
the
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spontaneous ones are mostly
the
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introverts. They dislike taking risks in any aspect of
life
 like business, career, food choices and purchasing new products.
However
, they would love to make plans for any upcoming
birthday
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birthdays
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 or festivals.
Secondly
, they would prefer to live their
life
 in
comfort
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their comfort
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 zone. Most
of
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the
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employers’
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employers
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 love hiring
such
kind
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kinds
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 of
people
 because they don’t tend to change jobs frequently. In my opinion, the former group of
people
 are lively and can make friends easily whereas the latter group would struggle to mix up with
new
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 group. I think
the
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extroverts can be more successful in
life
 as their attitude defines that they are ready to take up any challenge to reach their goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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