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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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Some think that the main objective of the countries should be the
increment
 of
production
 of
materials
 and
goods
. I partially disagree that the constant
increment
 in
production
 is an
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appropriate
appropiate
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appropriate
 goal
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because
becuase
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because
 it has some negative consequences. The idea of increasing constantly the
production
 of
materials
 and
goods
 is based on the globalization process where each export and import
goods
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 and
products
,
it
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is part of
the
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globalise
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 commerce.
However
, it is well-known that
this
practise
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practice
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represent
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represents
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 negative aspects for the domestic
economic
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 and for the worldwide environment.
For instance
, in the free trade relationships between
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countries
coutries
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countries
, they negotiate the interchange of
products
,
nontheless
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nonetheless
, in many times those trades produce a surplus or contrary a lack of
products
 that
increment
 the inflation or deflation of prices as a consequence of the invisible hand of Adams Smith that represent the
offre
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offer
office
 and demand.
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Additionally
Addiotionally
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Additionally
, the extraction of some natural resources
such
 as gold, coal and crude are affecting drastically our planet. Consequences
such
 as global warming, and
huge
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 amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere are depleting the ozone layer.
Therefore
, these practices of
production
 should be executed with the purpose of
fullfil
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fulfil
 the needs of
the
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apply
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society
instead
 of
make
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 of
this
 a profitable source.
For instance
, Natural resources should be only extracted to produce energy rather than consumed
products
such
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as jewelry
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jewelry
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 and so on. if we do not control our
production
 of
materials
 and
goods
, some natural disasters and social issues
such
 as poverty and hunger will keep affecting human beings negatively. In
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conclusion
conclucion
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conclusion
,
although
 some people consider that each country should
increment
 its
production
 of raw
materials
 and
products
 as
a
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 main goal, I strongly believe that it is crucial to
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establish
stablish
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establish
 a balance between
this
 objective and others that affect our ecosystem and equity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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