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Consumer behaviour has changed considerably in recent years due to technology. In what ways does technology affect consumer activities such as shopping? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, technology has changed
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 human behaviour has changed. The merits of
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 field outweigh the demerits. In these times,
people
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 that have the
internet
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 are getting
lasy
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lazy
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, the population have everything
in
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 the
internet
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 so they do not even have to go to
shop
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the shop
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 to do shopping. They have everything without going out.
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, in
Poland
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,Poland
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 there is
the
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a
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 company named Pyszne pl that delivers
you
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apply
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food and groceries for a low price. In our country, humanity
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 not have activities
in
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 work.
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, there is an increasing trend of working online at home. So
this
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forcing
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 you to stay in
house
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the house
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 and do nothing, only sitting and working. It might have
effect
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an effect
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 on obesity in our
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country
century
centry
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century
 due to low activity. In spite of the fact that
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 it might have some demerits, it has lots of advantages. In our
generation
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people
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 work very hard and they can not have
balance
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a balance
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 between family and work.
People
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 can order food or clothes
in
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on
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 the
internet
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 so they will not waste time
to go
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going
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 to
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 or
gallery
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galleries
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.
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, my whole family buy things
at
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on
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internet
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 so they do not waste time on
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 things.
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 advantage is
,
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government
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a government
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which
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it
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 can help their citizen. Due to considerably
change
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changes
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of
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in
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 technology
government
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governments
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 and companies improve their services
that
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and
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 applications will be
simply
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simple
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 and useful for everybody. Many
people
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 say that
,
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apply
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 companies follow our move
at
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on
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 the
internet
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 and commission their workers to improve services. In conclusion, even though technology
change
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has change
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 and due to
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 fact
people
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 getting overweight and getting
lasy
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lazy
 it
have
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has
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 more benefits in
this
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 field
such
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 as having more time and improving our life.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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