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People believe that not all school children have the natural ability to learn new language schools should not force school children to study a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The pie charts show the percentage of British employment, full-time and part-time, by gender between 1988 and 2012. 

Overall, the population significantly increased over the period.
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, the proportion of men having full-time jobs and women having part-time exhibited downward trends, whereas males doing part-time and females doing full-time showed upward trends. 
In 1988, the percentage of British guys who work full-time made the highest sector, at 53%,
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 dropped gradually to 47% in 2012.
Likewise
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, the rate of British girls working part-time was ranked
second
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 at the beginning of the period, at 22%, but it was a decline to one-fifth in 2012, overtaken by women with full-time. It is worth noting that the females in Britain having full-time saw the greatest changes in the proportion of employment, which was 19% in 1988, and increased by 7% at the end of the period.
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, males working part-time in the UK came in
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.
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 rate contributed to the smallest segment in 1988, with 6%, and
then
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 went up slightly to only 7% in 2012.
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