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Many working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and hand health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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People
 are working so hard that they deprive themselves of physical exercise
that is
 good for their bodies and good health, in the
next
 paragraphs I will explain why many working-class
people
 do not get enough exercise. In my own personal experience, I realise that
people
 substitute exercising with
work
,
for example
,
people
 who
work
 in the hospitality industry always justify themselves by mentioning that they are always on their feet trying to deliver the best service to the guests
therefore
 they do not see the reason for going to the gym or running. Everyone in the world is trying to make ends meet
therefore
 time for physical well-being is limited, Companies should consider introducing body fitness ,
therefore
 workplaces must have sports fields where staff can go and
work
 out during break and lunch periods. Businesses must
also
 introduce fitness awareness programs where trained bodybuilders are invited to teach employees how to
work
 out and maintain good health. In my conclusion, just like schools that have physical exercise as a subject , the same idea should be done with organisations.
People
 need to be taught and allowed to engage in different activities that will make them physically fit,
for instance
, there are some companies that participate in sports competitions with each other , on the other ,hand it builds friendships and business ideas between firms.
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