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Should not force children to learn foreign languages.

It is undoubtedly that learning a foreign
language
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 is essential for
children
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.
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, parents should not force the
students
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 to learn it. I share a similar point of view with
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 statement
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 the reason stated below. On the one hand, it is undeniable that learning other languages is very useful. Knowing different
language
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 help.
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have better chances
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of
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 studying and working in the future.
For example
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,
the
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apply
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most textbooks and journals are in English now and
who
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those who
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 are good at English may access
to
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these materials easier, leading to a better
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 of studying. Fluence in many languages is
also
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 a benefit when people
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 for a job.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 should not be forced to study a new
language
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 because of many reasons.
Firstly
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, if
students
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 learn under the pressure do not lead to a good
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. In
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children
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 who have to learn what they do not like many not only feel
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 but
also
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 lose their passion and motivation at studying.
Secondly
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, some
students
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 do not have a natural ability to learn languages.
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, they are very good at other areas
such
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 as science and art .
Such
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children
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 should be encouraged to study what they are good at in order to have better development,
instead
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 of being forced to learn what they are unable to do. In conclusion, I believe that learning a new
language
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 is important but it should be considered as an optional subject
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 as a compulsory subject for
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