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Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

#environment #responsibility #organization #government
Many people opine that international organizations should take responsibility
of
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 solving
environment
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issues
instead
 of each national
government
. In my opinion, I totally disagree.
Environment
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issues
 are heavy pressure on each
country
. It can be easily seen that environmental pollution comes from various reasons and it may vary from
country
 to
country
.
However
,
this
 pressing problem which each national
government
 are facing to
are
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 absolutely the same. So each
country
 should tackle those
issues
 on their own.
Moreover
, the priority to solving
environment
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 problems of countries are
differrent
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different
, too.
For instance
,
developing
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the developing
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country
 gives priority to
reduce
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hazadous
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hazardous
 gas emission from industrial activities and so on.
On the other hand
,
environment
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issues
 are the responsibility of
national
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the national
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organization
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organizations
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. The urgent environmental problems in countries are actually closely related to each other. So the action coordination of countries is necessary.
Rich
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The rich
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country
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countries
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 should give financial and technological support to developing
country
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countries
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 in dealing with the degradation of
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion, I totally disagree with the opinion that solving
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environmental
environment
enviroment
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environmental
 problems should be the responsibility of international
organization
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organizations
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 rather than each national
government
. It must be the duty of all people and
government
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governments
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 living on the Earth because
this
 planet does not belong to anyone.
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