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Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

#environment #responsibility #organization #government
Nowadays,
environment
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 is the most important problem
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in
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entire
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 world. In my opinion, tackling
environment
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environmental
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issues
 shouldn’t be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government
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Although
 the
environment
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environmental
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 problems of any country are similar, the reasons
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for
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 these
issues
 are different.
Therefore
, every
countries
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country
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 need to confront and solve their problem. The priority of solving
environment
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environmental
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issues
 in any country
are
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 not the same.
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, In
the
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development
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developed
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countries
, their priority is reducing air pollution
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due to industrial activities. Urgent
environment
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environmental
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issues
 in every
countries
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country
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 actually are closely related. For
this
 reason,
coordination
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the coordination
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 of actions by
countries
 is very essential. Rich
countries
 should support
in
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financial and technology
for
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other poor
countries
 in facing
environment
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 problems. In conclusion, I totally disagree with the opinion that solving
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environmental
environment
enviroment
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environmental
 problems should be the responsibility of international
organization
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organizations
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 rather than each national government. It must be the duty of all people living on
the
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Earth to protect our planet.
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