Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

Environmental degradation is taking place owing to
pollution
. Some proportion of
masses
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assert
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that
,
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air
travel
is
attributing
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attributed
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to atmospheric
pollution
so, in order to overcome
with
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this
issue the
price
of
air
tickets
should be soared which will result in limiting
air
traffic. I strongly disagree with
this
statement and my
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viewpoints
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view points
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viewpoints
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will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, most
of
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the
people
use
airline
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airlines
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for travelling internationally not for
commting
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commuting
commenting
within the country. If the
price
of
air
ticket
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tickets
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increases it will
further
become costly for
people
. To clarify
it
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, if an individual is travelling
to
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abroad for any meeting for commercial
purpose
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purposes
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it is obvious that the person can not go via roadways or railways so the individual must have to
travel
by aeroplane only and if the cost of
air
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ticket went up the individual could bear
loss
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the loss
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.
Moreover
, by commuting
through
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aeroplane
people
can reach on time on their desired place. To
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exemplify
examplify
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exemplify
, it takes only an hour to
travel
from Delhi to Mumbai via
airlines
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airline
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on
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the other hand, travelling
with
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trains
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train
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it
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could take two days to reach
at
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the
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destiny
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.
Thus
, the cost of
air
tickets
should not be inclined as it benefits a lot to
people
by saving their time and reaching
at
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their desired location without much expenditure.
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further
,aeroplanes are the not only
one
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source of
pollution
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which
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wich
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which
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is causing
deterioration
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the deterioration
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of
environment
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the environment
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. there
some
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other major sources as well so, why
to
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blame
air
travel
only for adverse implications? There are other means of transport
also
which proliferates
air
pollutants and indeed
people
are opting
them
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for them
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much over
air
travel
. An article published in New York Times stated that
,
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pollution
at
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in
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their country with buses is 43% whereas, through
airline
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airlines
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is 20%,
that
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is twice less than
pollution
caused by buses.
Hence
, the cost of
air
tickets
should not be increased. To recapitulate,
people
prefer aeroplanes only for voyaging overseas, not for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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which do not expel much
pollution
.
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,
air
travel
saves the time of
people
by making them reach
timely
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and comfortably so, from my perspective
price
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the price
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of
air
tickets
should not be increased because there are other sources of
air
pollution
also
and increasing the
price
of
ticket
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a ticket
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of
aeroplane
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an aeroplane
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only does not make sense.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental pollution
  • deterrent
  • aviation technologies
  • disproportionately affect
  • global carbon tax
  • alternative solutions
  • tourism-dependent economies
  • cleaner fuels
  • efficient flight paths
  • carbon emissions
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