Human activities are contributing to climate change. What extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that the recent global warming and other

climate

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changes are caused by human behaviours. I believe

this

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is true from both our daily

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point of view as well as

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efforts to expand our territories by destroying nature.

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, when we looked at our urban daily

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, there are numerous phases of our

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that are driving global

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change.

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, by using our private cars for

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, we contribute to

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the level of CO2. The increasing

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amount

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amount

of waste we produce each day

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help

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the carbon level. The more people live in busy city areas, the level of Co2 grows.

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to our daily

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, human beings continue our efforts to explore uncultivated areas and daily try to expand our territories.

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, forests are turned into housing lands and seas are becoming holiday beaches.

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of natural landscapes damages

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the global

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ecosystem.

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ecosystem influences atmospheric

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which is linked to

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global

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change. As discussed above, human behaviours in both daily urban life

as well as uncultivated

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area

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are becoming significant

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global

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change. Recent heat

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and

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number of typhoons are

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typical examples. I believe these are human deed and need some quick

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countermeasures

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counter measures

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before it

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too late.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

220 words

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climate change
global warming
greenhouse gases
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industrial processes
carbon footprint
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Human activities are contributing to climate change. What extend do you agree or disagree?

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