The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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It is often argued that aged and experienced
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should lead any organization
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young
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.
In my
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opinion, I strongly agree that older and amicable persons should be in the topmost managerial positions of most
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organizations as they can assist to boost the profit of their companies by utilizing years of relevant experience and good
knowledge
of their
colleagues
and interpersonal skills. The following sections of
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essay will explain the reasons behind the agreement. A crucial point to
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older
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an older
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person as the boss of the company is his vast experience on various technical and
marketplace related
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issues e.g. sales data, supply and consumer demand
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etc. He can apply
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knowledge
and various innovative ideas to earn more revenue for his workplace.
In contrast
, younger people who are relatively new recruits
mayn’t
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may not
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key areas. For
this
reason, he isn’t suitable for decision-making positions.
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more passion plus academic and research collaborations with other national and foreign varsities compared to his juniors which suits him best for the chairman position of his department. Another significant reason to consider
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member of an organization as
leader
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a leader
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is that he has
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idea of the manner,
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and social skills of his
colleagues
. From
this
perspective, he can assign a group of agile and energetic staff to do a specialized task e.g. market data analysis for a competitive product.
On the other hand
, a younger member shouldn’t have
such
sort of
knowledge
of his senior
colleagues
which makes him incompetent for the leadership position. To recapitulate, experience comes on account of one’s age.
This
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I absolutely agree that older persons should dominate the posts of chief managerial positions in comparison with their junior
colleagues
for the betterment of the organizations.
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