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Improving your intellectual skills is higher than doing group activities is what some people think Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#skills #group #activities #people
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Improving your intellectual
skills
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 is higher than doing
group
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activities
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 is what some people think. I am a proponent
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this
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 idea, which we will discuss in
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Group
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activities
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 raise your social
skills
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 by connecting you to people, when you are a part of a team building activity
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for
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 instance, you are being among
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a
group
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 of people which by default will increase your bonding and help you acquire high awareness in your intellectual
skills
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.
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, in
group
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activities
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 you will have the ability to communicate better with the surroundings
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 and attain higher emotional intelligence which is the main reason
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responsible for 80% of your career success in your career. Plus, when attending
group
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activities
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 constantly you will be able to increase your cognitive
skills
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 in the
perespective
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perspective
to
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 how you see and
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analyse
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analyse
 every aspect
in
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you
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 life, whether the
personal
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 or the career side.
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,dealing with obstacles is
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 prominent skill the person will gain when he will be part of
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group
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activities
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, facing
variety
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 of problems will not only make you overcome hard situations but
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 give you the ability to let unimportant things to let go. To add,
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 is all part of increasing the level of being a smart person in
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life with a pace moving so fast. To sum up, in my opinion participating in
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activities
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 help you raise your social
skills
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, as well as
you
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 communication
behavior
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 and the art of dealing with your daily obstacles.
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