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Improving your intellectual skills is higher than doing group activities is what some people think Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#skills #group #activities #people
Improving your intellectual
skills
 is higher than doing
group
activities
 is what some people think. I am a proponent
to
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this
 idea, which we will discuss in
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Group
activities
 raise your social
skills
 by connecting you to people, when you are a part of a team building activity
for
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 instance, you are being among
with
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a
group
 of people which by default will increase your bonding and help you acquire high awareness in your intellectual
skills
.
Moreover
, in
group
activities
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,activities
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 you will have the ability to communicate better with the surroundings
,
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 and attain higher emotional intelligence which is the main reason
and
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responsible for 80% of your career success in your career. Plus, when attending
group
activities
 constantly you will be able to increase your cognitive
skills
 in the
perespective
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perspective
to
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 how you see and
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analyse
analys
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analyse
 every aspect
in
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you
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 life, whether the
personal
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 or the career side.
Furthermore
,dealing with obstacles is
an
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 prominent skill the person will gain when he will be part of
the
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group
activities
, facing
variety
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 of problems will not only make you overcome hard situations but
also
 give you the ability to let unimportant things to let go. To add,
this
 is all part of increasing the level of being a smart person in
a
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life with a pace moving so fast. To sum up, in my opinion participating in
group
activities
 help you raise your social
skills
, as well as
you
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your
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 communication
behavior
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 and the art of dealing with your daily obstacles.
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